Staying Sporty

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Staying Sporty

I strongly believe that sports is way more important than music. Some people think that music is more better than sports, but they are wrong. Sports is more important than music.

Firstly, Why I say that sports is vital for you is because. What are you going to do about your health when you're listening to music? Infact, is it going to do to your health? It definitely is not going to make you fit that’s for sure. Well, if you play or do something sporty then yes it will be good for your health. I mean right? If you didn’t do any sports then your health won’t be as good as it can be.

Secondly, why I say that sports is vital for your health is because when you at least play or do something sporty it’s an it helps your health. Sometimes it can be an effective way for having a good health and that’s what everyone wants right good health? I would want that.  it’s very appalling to see your not even trying to be sporty not even in the littlest way. Come on New Zealand  don’t you want to be part of the Olympic. I would if I could. Be fit think about your health come on.

Lastly, why I think being sporty is good for you is because when you do just the littlest thing you are trying to be sporty. I mean wouldn’t you be trying? I think you would be and I know you would be. Don’t you think it’s fun in the littlest way? I find it very entertaining in every way because it’s good and beneficial for my health and yours’. Go outside don’t be a potato couch the dirt won’t hurt you. Believe me, you would not want to be the loner the one who never talks to others. Come on go outside even for a minute make your adrenaline pump.  

In summary, As I said before I strongly believe that sports is way more important than music. Be healthy and fit on every way.